Tassen Spellbinder

I've heard it seven million times, it seems like, but bravo for posting it.

er, its the thought that counts. do some editing, and formating, and post it again. nice idea at least

I know that I kinda threw things off in my last stanza, i'll try to think of something to fix that...

I like the thought behind it, but agree with the others: it needs punctuation, and either all or none of it should be rhyming.

Your punctuation and such needs much work, but excellent content wise.

Thanks.

i have nothing to add. good job

I know that one line sucks, but thats all I could come up with to fit my idea, and nothing at all that rhymed better, sorry. For most of the ...

Thanks. *looks around sheepishly* it was a death and dying project for language arts, and i decided I liked it

i think its good, cant find any typos/spelling/grammar/punctuation/other errors. good job.

Excellent. Content wise, I can't find anything that should be changed. I only found one error: when you talk about how Kathleen should open a buisness, you forgot a quotation ...

oops, crap. I didn't realize they had kept the old stuff. Ignore this one, I somehow double posted it.

That sounds alot like today's world. Very good.

That was really good. It was actually touching, something I haven't felt for a while. Keep writing.